Poor summaries that don't even make sense.
Lack of clear focus.
Not going into the why this matters. So what?
Misrepresenting the actual information that is presented.
Focus more on who the original article was trying to persuade.
How do you see the original text as persuasive?
Explore the credibility of the information. Narrow in on it. Mostly just bad commentary right now. Focus more on why we should believe what the original authors are trying to get at.
Throw the paper away and write about one section - start with a phrase that makes sense and has potential and go from there. Some of you don't even have that.
Questions about Advocacy Feasibility Report
*If it helps to organize this as an actual report with headings and subheadings, please do so.
*Keep in mind paragraph lengths. It is easier to read and understand short and clear paragraphs than long ones that go on and on. Also, shorter paragraphs help you, as a writer, keep redundancy in check.
*Focus on what matters. Why are you writing this? Be clear and explicit with this.
Write: A large part of convincing the reader of the problem is your first person narrative. This needs to come early in the paper (perhaps even at the complete beginning) and should be detailed and engaging. Tell us the story of what this problem looks like and how it impacts your world. This is the basis for your entire paper, so if you can't convince us of this from the get go, we won't care. Write a version of that narrative now.
Looking Forward:
Thursday, September 26 - Advocacy Feasibility Report rough draft posted to group Dropbox in BB - name the file with your last name and the assignment (ex: Advocacy RD Hartridge)
Monday, September 30 - workshop. Bring 1 peer letter and the marked copy of each draft.
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